November 29

Ed 100 WC

As they were about walk away, the door slowly opened with a spooky creek. The person stepped out of the door but they couldn’t see his face, a flash of lightning suddenly flashed a light on his face. Every time there was lightning he got closer. He was about five meters away, they could see his face. He had scares on his face, some of his ear was missing, and he had sharp teeth and a tattoo. Another lightning bolt flashed. The man was gone. They turned around, and the man was behind them. The adrenalin rushed through them, he a smiled….


Posted November 29, 2013 by baker2012 in category Uncategorized

1 thoughts on “Ed 100 WC

  1. Miss Willing

    Hi Ed
    Good use of different sentence openers – creates more variety in your writing. Your second sentence is a little repetitive – could you think of a different way of how his face was lit up by the lightning? Great picture; a rather scary looking character!
    Miss Willing
    Team 100WC
    Huntingdon, England

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