Michaela’s 100 WC

I quickly ran and found shelter. I couldn’t see anything because it was midnight. I could vaguely see our modern house being ruined. I turned around and started running through the rain, pouring down just like a waterfall. The violent storm was getting worse as I listened to the thunder and the lightning. I could see the street flooding considering the water was up to my ankles. I couldn’t see my family and I couldn’t see my house anymore, I was terrified. I started making my way towards the park bench. I had no idea what was going to happen next.

2 Comments on Michaela’s 100 WC

  1. Mrsb Team 100
    November 4, 2013 at 6:55 am (5 years ago)

    I like the way you compare the rain to a waterfall! Well done a good description!

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  2. Emily Sims
    November 4, 2013 at 4:24 pm (5 years ago)

    Michaela,
    The first sentence had me completely hooked straight away! You use short sentences really well to set the scene of your 100WC, and you use a wide range of varying vocabulary- well done! If possible, try to see if you could start your sentences differently sometimes rather than using ‘I’.
    Emily, Team100

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