Ruby 100WC

I woke with excitement because it was the first day of school, but not if the violent storm was still going. I couldn’t hear Mum or Dad so I looked out onto the street of my country home and trees had fallen down. Then out of nowhere my room lit up with a bright light, it was the lighting.  “BANG,” went the thunder. I jumped. Then my Mum and Dad’s bedroom door opened. I closed the blinds and jumped back into bed. They came in and sat down and said that there was not any school today. 

2 Comments on Ruby 100WC

  1. Opal Class
    October 31, 2013 at 9:24 am (6 years ago)

    What a fantastic effort! We really liked the amount of detail you added and your description of the thunder.

    Next time try to use different words each time.

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  2. Graeme Team100WC
    November 3, 2013 at 11:10 am (6 years ago)

    Wow.

    What a great piece of descriptive writing. I jumped out of my computer seat when the thunder went ‘bang!’.

    I wonder what your feelings were when you found out there was no school? Where you happy or sad?

    Well done,

    Graeme #Team100WC

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