Luke 100WC

The violent storm was unexpected, as it was sunny just ten minutes ago. The saying Melbourne has four seasons in one day is so true. “This storm is as bad as a giant vacuum sucking the town up. Start evacuating the city!” exclaimed the news reporter. The Tritain family bolted to their unpacked suitcases and bags. Whilst they were packing them the could hear kids screaming because of their house had crumbled in to pieces! Jack, the only child, looked outside through the window and saw families running, trying to survive this monstrous storm. Luckily the Tritain family had a solid house.

1 Comment on Luke 100WC

  1. Penny Team 100WC
    November 3, 2013 at 9:01 pm (6 years ago)

    That’s a very dramatic story! The opening sentence is good as it draws the reader in, and you’ve used some good vocabulary, especially ‘monstrous storm’ at the end. Good writing – well done!


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