Michaela’s Halloween Challenge

The big figure stomped its way through the long narrow hallway. You could see eight hairy arms and a body as big as a bear. The glaring red eyes stood out in the darkness. As it moved towards the smashed window, you could see the big and sharp fangs sticking out. Suddenly the figure disappears, there is a gust of wind. Everything goes silent. BANG! The whole room shook like an earthquake. It appeared and made its way to the end of the room and stopped. No one knew what was going to happen next.

2 Comments on Michaela’s Halloween Challenge

  1. Mrs Radd (Team100WC)
    October 27, 2013 at 5:47 pm (5 years ago)

    Hi Michaela,

    This is a description of a terrifying creature! Is it a spider-bear?
    I like the way that you described its eyes and fangs.

    I also like the fact that you went on to tell us what the creature did – it must have been huge to make the room shake like an earthquake!
    (Nice simile by the way!)

    Well done, keep up the good work!

    Mrs Radd (Team 100WC)

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  2. Ms Wilson (100 WC team) B.C. Canada
    October 29, 2013 at 6:47 am (5 years ago)

    Hi Michaela,
    I love stories with an open ending. Way to go…great descriptions. For example, you create vivid images with ‘stomping figure’ and ‘glaring eyes.’
    Happy writing! I look forward to your next story.
    Ms Wilson

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