Angus’s Halloween Challenge

In the shadows of the dark cage all that could be seen were the red eyes of the beast that roamed the empty cage, filled with torture and fearlessness. Hung up all around the cage were the dead skeletons of the best Australian soldiers who had lost fights against the great beast. The very strange people that happened to visit the night zoo knew that the soldiers didn’t have a chance against the beast because with his gigantic horns and swords sticking out all over his body it was very easy to tell that he was immortal.

2 Comments on Angus’s Halloween Challenge

  1. Dr Rodgers (Team 100wc)
    October 27, 2013 at 10:20 pm (6 years ago)

    Angus, this is a confident piece of writing, and makes me want to read on more – like how did the Australian soldiers’ bones get in there? Your last sentence mitt be better with a dash or semi-colon., to make it easer to read.

  2. Kalpana(Team 100)
    October 28, 2013 at 7:50 pm (6 years ago)

    Hello Angus, good narrative style! Quite a scary story, Good job!


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